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Thank you as ever for reading Family Lines so attentively. I really appreciate the care you take in commenting on the story. And I'm very sorry you felt let down by this chapter. Marge's phrase 'birth parents' is used because she knows now that Deb knows the truth of her parentage. See Ellen's letter at the end of the preceding chapter. By now there are no more secrets. But I can see it is a somewhat impersonal phrase for her to use in the context.

Betty was younger and more naive than Dolores. But Jim had only had a fling with Betty. In a previous draft I had referred to him having 'a fling with a yellow dress'. Dolores was the one he was serious about.

As for her pregnancy being managed by her mother and sister, this was a more benign solution than the ones Marge mentions in her letter, which after all were the traditional ones at that time in Ireland. Betty wasn't in a position to keep a child, especially after Jim's departure. But of course you're right she might not have been entirely happy about being taken over by others.

I plan to read through the whole manuscript now that I have completed it and will iron out any inconsistencies at that stage. So thank you for pointing out the weak spots. Your help will make me a better writer!

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Thank you. I guess the truth is hard to bear no matter when one hears it. I'm happy that the story continues to captivate you.

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